Parts of my book PLEASE tell me if its good or bad?

I really like it. I'm twelve and writing too, maybe I'll put mine on here for people to judge. I think you write really good dialogue, but there aren't paragraphs. I really would like to read more now and find out about the characters. It's a lot like Twilight I think. That's good because Twilight is one of my favorite books. Keep writing because this could go somewhere. I want to read some other stuff you have!